• How would you rate my writing skills?

    Best answer: I'm going to politely disagree with the positive reviews. I see a handful of outright mistakes and a lot of odd choices with verb tenses that IMO weaken the narrative. And I don't see the semicolon use as correct at all. (Horrors, I've disagreed with my friend Crow!) I rarely do line-by-line critique... show more
    Best answer: I'm going to politely disagree with the positive reviews. I see a handful of outright mistakes and a lot of odd choices with verb tenses that IMO weaken the narrative. And I don't see the semicolon use as correct at all. (Horrors, I've disagreed with my friend Crow!)

    I rarely do line-by-line critique here because the writers' reactions tend to be defensive, hostile, or abusive. If you care to see detail and can promise you'll act like a professional, I can try to find time to do a LBL. (And it's perfectly okay if you're not yet ready for that, too.)

    Edit: We stay quiet for a while; [<---replace with a comma] [the ←-delete needless words] both [of us<--delete] either too tired or too annoyed to bother talking [to each other<--delete]. It's not like I'm complaining, either. [←-This is wordy, but it also gives your narrator a real-sounding voice] The wind is howling [howls] like a horror movie [opener←-awkward word choice. Maybe ‘soundtrack’?] and the streets are heavily shadowed with a pale late-night glow[←-Switch to active voice, present tense, like the first part of the sentence: ...and a pale late-night glow heavily shadows the streets]. It's comforting [in some odd way, like<--delete][.] I could sink into the dark shadows of the night and disappear if I wanted to. [Comforting as it is, ←-delete] the[The] delayed pain of Ameki's nails digging into my arm [is kicking in now,--delete] [kicks in], and I [Eek, failure to proofread!] [it]takes all my willpower [not] to [not<--delete] ask her to lighten up[ a bit←-delete].

    I know, that’s hard to read all marked up. Most of what I did was make all the verbs present tense, removing present progressive (“is xing”) and get rid of words you don’t need. If you agreed with every correction, which you don’t have to do, it would read:

    We stay quiet for a while, both either too tired or too annoyed to bother talking. It's not like I'm complaining, either. The wind howls like a horror movie soundtrack and a pale late-night glow heavily shadows the streets. It's comforting. I could sink into the dark shadows of the night and disappear if I wanted to. The delayed pain of Ameki's nails digging into my arm kicks in, and it takes all my willpower not to ask her to lighten up.

    Nothing’s missing or radically changed, really, but that first paragraph went from 104 to 82 words. You see if you can reduce the next paragraph, or some other paragraph, by twenty percent. It’s a learned skill, and this is a good time to start.
    10 answers · Books & Authors · 16 hours ago
  • What is the most beautifully written book you’ve ever read?

    Beautiful, not as in story, but as in the way the author structures and writes his sentences. For me it would have to be Lord of the Rings. What about you?
    Beautiful, not as in story, but as in the way the author structures and writes his sentences. For me it would have to be Lord of the Rings. What about you?
    16 answers · Books & Authors · 11 hours ago
  • Was homosexuality the main reason for the decline of the Roman Empire?

    Best answer: Yeah, too many gays.
    Best answer: Yeah, too many gays.
    15 answers · History · 12 hours ago
  • The native Americans practiced slavery, where is your outrage?

    It was well known that the Native Americans enslaved the people of the tribes they conquered. However, I have never seen any liberal outraged because of this
    It was well known that the Native Americans enslaved the people of the tribes they conquered. However, I have never seen any liberal outraged because of this
    29 answers · History · 2 days ago
  • Philosophy question, shouldn't people have the right to decide if they want to live or die?

    Best answer: There is a question in ethics as to whether or not a right to die can coexist with a right to life. If, it is argued, the right to life is inalienable, it cannot be surrendered, and therefore may be incompatible with a right to die.[4] A second debate exists within bioethics over whether the right to die is... show more
    Best answer: There is a question in ethics as to whether or not a right to die can coexist with a right to life. If, it is argued, the right to life is inalienable, it cannot be surrendered, and therefore may be incompatible with a right to die.[4] A second debate exists within bioethics over whether the right to die is universal, only applies under certain circumstances (such as terminal illness), or if it exists. It is also stated that 'right to live' is not synonymous to 'obligation to live'. From that point of view, the right to live can coexist with the right to die.[5]
    A court in the American state of Montana, for example, has found that the right to die applies to those with life-threatening medical conditions. Suicide advocate Ludwig Minelli, euthanasia expert Sean W. Asher and bioethics professor Jacob M. Appel, in contrast, argue that all competent people have a right to end their own lives. Appel has suggested that the right to die is a test for the overall freedom of a given society.[6]

    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Right_to_d...
    14 answers · Philosophy · 2 days ago
  • Were black Americans systematically targeted by eugenics during 1920-1940s?

    between 1920 and 1940 it was considered perfectly acceptable by the american public to sterilize people against their will for the good of the nation. one question though were they any centralized efforts to systematically sterilize blacks to reduce their population?
    between 1920 and 1940 it was considered perfectly acceptable by the american public to sterilize people against their will for the good of the nation. one question though were they any centralized efforts to systematically sterilize blacks to reduce their population?
    11 answers · History · 3 hours ago
  • What is the proof that "I am"?

    What is the proof that "I am"? If I say "I am not" how to convince me otherwise? "I think therefore I am" does not seem to work since you can reply to that "I am not" and "Thoughts are not".
    What is the proof that "I am"? If I say "I am not" how to convince me otherwise? "I think therefore I am" does not seem to work since you can reply to that "I am not" and "Thoughts are not".
    22 answers · Philosophy · 2 days ago
  • Did Hitler bomb UK cities in World War 2?

    Even if there were children in them? Isn't that pretty much the evilest thing a person could do?
    Even if there were children in them? Isn't that pretty much the evilest thing a person could do?
    22 answers · History · 2 days ago
  • What is the meaning of life?

    35 answers · Philosophy · 4 days ago
  • Which book would you like to recommend to everybody?

    Best answer: See I read this and didn't love it. It just felt very repetitive to me. If you like Stephen King's non-horror vibe though read the Dark Tower Cycle. It's 7 books and I love them because the story builds throughout, but there are also many exciting parts in-between.
    Best answer: See I read this and didn't love it. It just felt very repetitive to me. If you like Stephen King's non-horror vibe though read the Dark Tower Cycle. It's 7 books and I love them because the story builds throughout, but there are also many exciting parts in-between.
    11 answers · Books & Authors · 16 hours ago
  • Was Adolf Hitler a Nazi?

    12 answers · History · 22 hours ago
  • How did Donald Trump win against Hillary Clinton last election?

    It's already been a year and a half that Donald Trump beat Hillary Clinton, and I'm still wondering is how? Hillary Clinton was a much better and more qualified candidate than Donald Trump was.
    It's already been a year and a half that Donald Trump beat Hillary Clinton, and I'm still wondering is how? Hillary Clinton was a much better and more qualified candidate than Donald Trump was.
    42 answers · History · 5 days ago